Desire...


Crumpled sheets portray
Failed
nerves; they conceal-
my
illicit desire

Prompted at : 3WW

And also submitted at : Monday poetic train

13 visitors stopped by.:



susan said...

The final line is where this takes off. Any chance of changing form and lengthening this?

Winnie the poohi said...

Shall try :)

Thank you susan for visiting !

Anonymous said...

Speaks volumes, you wrapped it up nicely!

floreta said...

great metaphor!

Tumblewords: said...

Nicely done - a slice of life...

Thom Gabrukiewicz said...

I'm with Susan; I'd love for this to go on for several more stanzas. It's just so well-crafted.

Anonymous said...

interesting !!

gautami tripathy said...

Grin!

dancing verses

M as in Mint said...

Not any more! :) Great byte!


Scary Story

Sherri B. said...

So much with so few words!

Winnie the poohi said...

Sweet talking guy thank you :)

floreta.. tumblewords.. thank you so!

Tomg i shall certainly try to ..

pratsie thnx :)

Meera welcome to my blog :)

Feldging poet thanx :D

Winnie the poohi said...

usha :)

Anonymous said...

super!