Naisaiku Challenge- Week II


Absolve me of aberrant afflictions
Insanity reigns with impervious ignominy
My Lucid Sanity Lives
With impervious ignominy,Insanity reigns
Of aberrant afflictions, absolve me!

Prompted at : Naisaiku Challenge

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SweetTalkingGuy.. said...

You've got some big words going on here and perhaps it's the writers cry to his/her maker which is the starting point for this fine piece of poetry. I like the way you've used the re-verse verse and gently worded it to suit the mood.

Wendy Naisa said...

Hiya, I really like this and it works so well for you in this more restricted line form.

Thanks for taking The NaisaiKu.. Challenge! again this week!

!nversed Poignancy! said...

Lovely, Liked the concept of ablution in absolution..
Nice word play and puntuation-play too..:) :D
Good One!

!nversed Poignancy! said...

Lovely, Liked the concept of ablution in absolution..
Nice word play and punctuation-play too..:) :D
Good One!

Stan Ski said...

This really makes it's point, but I think I'll stick with 'Bless me father for I have sinned'

mayz said...

i've really started likin these Naisaiku's of urs...really intriguin

rauf said...

the words got stuck in my throat Poohees, can't swallow. please give me some water.
Now i have to go back to school.
i am such a dimwit Poohee sweet.
you will be shocked to know how little i knows.
EEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE
i don even knows how to puttees a smiley there, that was a smiley.

Illeen said...

WoW.. :D
u write so well..

(¯`•._.•[Raaji]•._.•´¯) said...

so passionate! so beautiful!

Winnie the poohi said...

Thank you Sweet talking guy.. I am kind of falling for this form greatly :D

Wenda thank you :)

Bharat thank you so! I really appreciate your comments :D

Stan :D :D Thats easier I agree he he

mayz oh thats so sweet of you! I am loving this form a lot too :D

Rauf ah you humble me so! What you know in richness of your life.. I can never ever scale upto it.. but thank you so much for being so sweet :)

Illeen thank you :D

Raaji welcome to my blog and thank you :)

Leo said...

sueperb! :)

Neeru said...

:) Ha, I never even realized they were the same words till I read the whole thing again. Very beautiful.