Wind? Love?

Two flowers sneak closer,
Slowly they touch,
A moment together,

Lifetime apart

Wind the hero,and the villain


Prompted at : One single impression

P.S: I dunno what to title this.. do suggest :D

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Usha Pisharody said...

Woah!

Utter beauty!

Winnie the poohi said...

:D thank you so!

Jeeves said...

Wow!!!Nice one.

Sneha said...

havent seen better =D... this was breathtaking really

Winnie the poohi said...

Jeeves and Sneha thank you :)

Jeeves.. I love your poems.. I have you blog rolled :D

kitehorse said...

utterly original and limpid

Deborah Godin said...

Very nicely done, I love the bittersweet conclusion - the two faces of the movement. How about "Windlove"?

gautami tripathy said...

Beautifully put!

movement

Amias said...

Simply beautiful ... well put!

Winnie the poohi said...

kite horse thank you for the kind words...

Wind love .. hmm will wait for other options too .. thank you so much deborah.. you were the only one who responded to my question :D

Gautami thank you :)

Amias thank you so!

Fledgling Poet said...

Wind, the hero and the villain

Gorgeous! Such simple words, but such a poignant message.

Pam said...

So much longing and so little control in this poem. Very nicely written.

Winnie the poohi said...

fledging poet and pam thank you so!

floreta said...

funny before i even read your words i immediately personified the picture of the two flowers as love. :) great idea!

Winnie the poohi said...

Must be ur name that suggested it :d floreta :D

Roswila said...

Very nice! Title? Does it need one? Shorter poems often do fine without one. But my sense would be to focus on the wind's nature in some way, it's duality, it's two-sidedness. Something like (but this is not an actual suggestion) FLIPSIDES.

Winnie the poohi said...

Interesting one roswila :D

Thank you for dropping by :)

Subhajit said...

I believe the wind is more a Villain than a Hero...
Coz the flowers never know when they meet again even after staying drastically close to each other....

SO near yet so far

Pretty Me!! said...

Way creative one !!

Tumblewords: said...

Lovely movement. I don't think this needs a title - as long as it appears with the photo.

Tumblewords: said...

Thinking - you might want to tighten the poem a bit and print it on an enlarged picture for a haiga...just a thought.

Winnie the poohi said...

Nice idea tumblewords.. I might do just that :)

indicaspecies said...

I love the photograph, and the words.

How about 'Kissing Goodbye' for a title?

zoya gautam said...

..enjoyed reading ur poem..my entry for the caption is:-
'windmilled dreams'..
(ps- only 'windmilled' sounds better,but i'm somehow sure u won't like it!)..many thanks..

Winnie the poohi said...

zoya windmilled fits perfectly!

just the name i was looking for!

Maggie said...

I like the movements of the two flowers.

Leo said...

winnie, i bow to thy superior imagination and vividity of thought. True beauty in ur words. This is your best work to date i feel.

C. R. Stone said...

Mercy, very well written.